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3 Comments posted on "The Mystery Begins - Page 2"
Mary on July 10th, 2007 at 10:13 am #
This is so, like, a guy, to only be concerned about his team losing a player…lol. Fun seeing your fiction. I’d LOVE to blog my fiction and get feedback, but ya know…if only it could still be publishable (other than e-pubbed). Are you editing these before posting? Just curious, I know you said that it was stuff you’d written a long time ago. You’ve done a pretty clean job so far!
MInTheGap on July 10th, 2007 at 2:01 pm #
I don’t know that if I ever published my works I would get anything for it. I need to judge interest first! At least it’s something new and interesting to read. I wonder if I should do a post on the main blog that references the story. If I could find some life principle, I could. Or even some kind of weekly spotlight over on the main site. Now you have me thinking. I’m changing the names from original before posting, but pretty much they’re staying the same. When I wrote them in high school I actually had a English teacher read through and help me with grammar. (These were written mostly during my junior and senior years.) One of the things that I’m noticing is that I’m telling a lot of the story with dialog rather than context. I wonder if this is good or bad…
Mary on July 10th, 2007 at 2:20 pm #
Well, it’s funny with newbie writers we all tend to make the same mistakes at the outset. Things to watch for are writing in passive voice rather than active (you don’t seem to have a problem with this, of course I’ve only read a few pages), head-hopping (getting into more than one characters head in a single scene), telling too much rather than showing it, etc. Using dialog a lot is great, studies have been shown that the more “white space” in the margins of a book the better. It really hooks your reader, and keeps the story in the “now”. I have a problem with too much interior monologue. My characters think too much! You have some good ideas for connecting the two blogs. Maybe you should have something in the sidebar at MInTheGap that is just for this blog…rss feed, something more eye-catching that where you have it now. Just a thought. You’re going to run out of room on the sidebars! |